Menma's Fetish Chapter 9
Added 2023-10-23 16:01:01 +0000 UTCThis chapter...is a doozy.
I was hesitant to send it as is; part of me wanted to ship it as two separate chapters. At the same time, I originally envisioned it as one chapter, and part of me feels that it isn't complete unless it's presented as a whole. The final word count is nearly 11,000 words, which is pretty hefty.
I'm confident that you guys will enjoy what I have in store for y'all. Let me know what you guys think!
Chapter IX
Previous chapters:
Chapter I
Chapter II
Chapter III
Chapter IV
Chapter V
Chapter VI
Chapter VII
Chapter VIII
Comments
Great chapter! You weren’t kidding about the length, I had to pace myself lol. But I didn’t see any ideal stopping points to cut the chapter short so I understand. Since it was a lengthy chapter, I hope you don’t mind a lengthy review. Kushina’s always been a willing participant to do whatever Sasuke wants, but you did a really good job illustrating her submissiveness in a new way this time around. It was satisfying to see her discover that she likes him being in control, even when they’re not trying to fulfill Minato’s kink. The way the story was going, I was sure you were going to take your time with Hinata. But I’m so glad that you decided to make Sasuke break her this early! Although I like normal Hinata (especially in Naruto’s fetish remastered), to me, broken Hinata is best Hinata. Also Menma getting a front row seat really made her transformation that more satisfying. And from the looks of it, she’s got more stamina than both Kushina and Naruko combined. Which is crazy but welcomed! Glad that Naruko was able to reconcile with Sasuke but her frustration was understandable to be honest. Though now I’m wondering what other characters you plan to introduce to the story now that she’s found the resolve to outlast anybody. I’d really like a dark horse contender if possible. But whatever you have planned, I’m looking forward to it. You’re on a hot streak!
Food&LiquorTrack2
2023-10-25 06:17:13 +0000 UTCMan that was something, one of the best thing you’ve written so far, the Kushina scene was just incredible! Keep them coming!
Aizen
2023-10-24 16:59:44 +0000 UTC
